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Post by Addison's girl on Aug 26, 2012 8:23:50 GMT -5
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Post by Addison's girl on Aug 26, 2012 9:07:58 GMT -5
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Post by Addison's girl on Aug 26, 2012 9:13:10 GMT -5
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Post by Addison's girl on Dec 7, 2012 17:08:37 GMT -5
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Post by Deleted on Dec 10, 2012 5:03:34 GMT -5
Sorry, I'm a little late for this... enjoyed it very much, girls, as usual! You describe the feelings of both Maddie and David very accurately and in a way that makes the reader able to understand them, follow their thoughts, feel what they are feeling. Maddie's sadness is palpable; so is David's remorse and steely determination to set things right and get her back. I don't mind that you ended this chapter on an angsty note because I know that good things come to those who wait... and I must say I'm glad that nothign happened at that party - Maddie would have regretted it immediately, and of course blamed David for it, and besides, I don't think it would have been in character for Maddie to jump at an occasion like that, not in the miserable state she was in. She would need more time and especially the knowledge that this wasn't juts a fling or a "goodbye grope" LOL I wish she would step back from her general negative attitude of always expecting/thinking the worst, especially when it comes to David - instead of appreciating his stepping back when he saw that waiter come, seeing it as a sign of respect and a proof that he is not just after quick and easy sex, she's offended and takes it badly. But I'm in the mild Xmas mood and will give her that she is generally in a bad and miserable state of mind, still full of sadness so heavy on her heart that she really needs to be taken firmly by the hand and led into the light again, and I'm sure this is going to happen soon. Thanks for the gift, girls!
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Post by Addison's girl on Dec 10, 2012 5:33:27 GMT -5
Thanks for the great review. You misinterpreted Maddie's feelings after the waiter interrupted. She wasn't offended she was miserable that she still wanted David so badly and that their relationship was over etc.
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Post by Deleted on Dec 10, 2012 9:16:37 GMT -5
Yes I see that too, but I thought that at least for a time she was upset that David had ended their encounter so abruptly and she thought he was avoiding her after that and was ready to think he didn't really care for her and it had just been a fling to him. I think I read that in these lines:
"She didn’t understand why David had turned into the cold unapproachable man of the past few months after they were interrupted by the waiter in the middle of their little tryst. He had barely said two words to her since then and of course he hadn’t tried to kiss her again. Maybe it was just the excitement of the party that caused David to shower her with his charm and attention. She figured he had realized it was a bad idea to lead her on when the waiter almost caught them making love."
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Post by Addison's girl on Dec 10, 2012 10:39:00 GMT -5
She wasn't offended.
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Post by Addison's girl on Dec 10, 2012 10:50:06 GMT -5
And she thought D didn't want her anymore due to his behavior. She was hurt and scared not at all angry
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Post by imdavidsgirl on Dec 10, 2012 22:42:50 GMT -5
Thanks so much sis for the review ! We are hard at work in part 2 ! Hope you'll enjoy it!
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Post by imdavidsgirl on Dec 10, 2012 22:44:48 GMT -5
And Maddie wasn't mad like Sue said but hurt , disappointed & confused I say. That's the point we wanted to get across. And I think David was confused too .
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Post by Deleted on Dec 11, 2012 4:07:44 GMT -5
No, mad or angry is the wrong word, offended too. But as I said, she took it badly, she was upset. Yes, sad, disappointed and hurt too - you got that point along very well! Bottom line: negative feelings; she was thinking and expecting the worst, and I see that as a general trait of Maddie's character, but as I said - I can even understand her here and don't blame her.
Oh, and I'm sure I will enjoy part 2!! Will it come out before Christmas?
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Post by Addison's girl on Dec 11, 2012 5:38:07 GMT -5
Yes it should.
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Post by imdavidsgirl on Dec 21, 2012 10:14:54 GMT -5
We did it its done! The conclusion to Blue Moon Xmas should be published tonight!
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Post by Addison's girl on Dec 21, 2012 19:02:34 GMT -5
It is up
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